Revising Poetry for the collection: a peek.

The Breakup Poem

Like a surge of emotion as I felt tears in my eyes 

every time I see her, hearing her heartache in her voice

as she tells me no.

Truths that cannot be told only secretly whispered to my heart.

In denial of emotion, that cries out in time with the drumbeat

thundering in my chest as I try to remember to breathe each

time I see her.

Like the sorrow at the distance between my hands and her touch,

the gulf of thoughtlessness, the ideas of what love should be 

or might be but is.

Lies untold never should have been mentioned, emotions take hold

screaming out in the whine of a steel guitar stroking out in the

pain that I feel in my stomach as she walks away.

Originally Love Song

published Friday, April 26, 2012.

revised July 31, 2016.

I have been going through the last 4-5 years of blog poetry (which actually contain poetry I wrote many years before) and revising as needed. I find myself cringing all over again at some of the things I wrote back then also finding that I have published 168 poems with the word love in them. 

Yep, for someone who has never been in love- it's kind of scary.

What's worse is the abundance of basic grammatical errors that run amok throughout all that work.

Yikes.